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A most interesting Shakespearean sonnet, as much for its intelligent use of devices Shakespeare himself used masterfully as for its content. The line break between L3 and L4 has a stunning effect, and 'merely beauteous lamentation' is a provocative, and unique, perspective. That phrase sets up 'beauty' as a keyword for the sonnet: "beauty's power" and "lastless beauty." There is something sad, decadent, and sensuous that runs through the sequence that, if it eludes my powers of description, nonetheless registers in my amygdala. Your adjectives here are so extraordinary it elevates the entire project: "beauteous lamentation," "small faith," lastless beauty," "lazy doom." Love serves a purpose as a secondary key word, albeit it is used only in a subordinate capacity, though it plays a central thematic role in the sonnet. The additive progression of your couplet is delicious: once pleasure...joy twice heard... blessing thrice. For me to say this is a lovely sonnet would be to damn it with faint praise. Reading your poetry and translations has been for me a consistent pleasure. You reward your readers' attentiveness with precious gifts.